A English Paper
09-21-2003, 10:08 PM
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this is my rough daft of a english paper i have to write. Its from beowulf. It's where grendel fights him. I had to re-write it from grendels point of view. Let me know what you think.
As i awoke i found a terrible burden apon my self. The moon was high and my skin burned. I knew i was about to embark on a terrible mission, but i could do nothing to stop myself. My skin slowly began to change. It burned with a firry hatred unlike any, a firry hatred straight from the depths of hell. Hair started to protrude, mussels tensing time and time again. It could not be stoped now the change to far along. As i fell to the floor my legs and arms became the same. Finger nails turned to razor sharp claws. My jaw now strong as a bear my bite worse than a viper. As blood ran through my vanes my hatred grew. the urge to kill was now fully apon my liken body. I ran out of the marsh at full speed.
As i approached the halls of herot i could only think of one thing the death of all those within. I quickly reached the great hall in which my sleeping pray await. With every passing second my hunger for blood rose with me. Till i could no longer wait. As i reached the doors of this great hall i could smell my prey. I rushed aganst the door and with one hard hit of my claws the door broke into hundreds of pieces and flew off of it's iron forged hinges, my strength was never so great before. Inside i saw the pray, the warriors that were about to satisfy my urge for blood. They slept two by two on top of one another in rows down each side of this great hall. I ran to the closest warrior and riped him out of his sweet sukulant slumber. Before he had even awoke i had bitten him and sucked his body dry of all blood. I tour him limb from limb till there was nothing left. Not a scream not a wimpier or even a wispier came from him. The only sound was of his bones crunching under my powerful bite. As i finished him off one of the other warriors seemed to be watching. He then became my next target. He was much bigger than the rest but non the less food for my belly. I rushed toward him with the speed of a thousand sprinters. As soon as i stood in front of him he grabbed my neck with one of his hands, and i knew then at that very point that no man that i had ever seen before or since had this kind of strength. I quickly struck with my jaws open at him but i returned with nothing buts lungs gasping for air. I was being coked by this mere mortal. He than bound my claws, i now had no way to fight or free myself. I struggled i jumped and gasped and shooke but no matter what i could not free myslef. We battled for what seemed like hours as we brushed aganst the walls of this great hall. this man wanted nothing less than my death. All of the warriors in the hall had now been awakened and had come to help rid me from this earth. But no mortals sword was sharp enough to break my skin. Only this one man had the strength to hold me at bay. As the leader of the pack had finally decided he had enough he riped my arm straight from it's socket. Pain ran through my body as he held my arm high all i could think about was getting away. I ran from that great hall with such speed mere man could not fathom.
Soon i arrived at the marsh and quickly went to my lair. The change was already starting to take place. I was now becoming once again what i had hated so much just seconds before. As i my hairy skin once again turned back to flesh i knew i would never again change. My arm held high as a trophy by a man stronger than all men. By the head honcho. I felt my life leaving me as blood ran from my gaping wound. Soon i knew it would be allover as i feel to the ground. My lair began to blur the light seemed to dim. I Tensed of as i went into a state of which i cant explain my blood pooling on the floor my life leaving me. All was over as i passed.
As i awoke i found a terrible burden apon my self. The moon was high and my skin burned. I knew i was about to embark on a terrible mission, but i could do nothing to stop myself. My skin slowly began to change. It burned with a firry hatred unlike any, a firry hatred straight from the depths of hell. Hair started to protrude, mussels tensing time and time again. It could not be stoped now the change to far along. As i fell to the floor my legs and arms became the same. Finger nails turned to razor sharp claws. My jaw now strong as a bear my bite worse than a viper. As blood ran through my vanes my hatred grew. the urge to kill was now fully apon my liken body. I ran out of the marsh at full speed.
As i approached the halls of herot i could only think of one thing the death of all those within. I quickly reached the great hall in which my sleeping pray await. With every passing second my hunger for blood rose with me. Till i could no longer wait. As i reached the doors of this great hall i could smell my prey. I rushed aganst the door and with one hard hit of my claws the door broke into hundreds of pieces and flew off of it's iron forged hinges, my strength was never so great before. Inside i saw the pray, the warriors that were about to satisfy my urge for blood. They slept two by two on top of one another in rows down each side of this great hall. I ran to the closest warrior and riped him out of his sweet sukulant slumber. Before he had even awoke i had bitten him and sucked his body dry of all blood. I tour him limb from limb till there was nothing left. Not a scream not a wimpier or even a wispier came from him. The only sound was of his bones crunching under my powerful bite. As i finished him off one of the other warriors seemed to be watching. He then became my next target. He was much bigger than the rest but non the less food for my belly. I rushed toward him with the speed of a thousand sprinters. As soon as i stood in front of him he grabbed my neck with one of his hands, and i knew then at that very point that no man that i had ever seen before or since had this kind of strength. I quickly struck with my jaws open at him but i returned with nothing buts lungs gasping for air. I was being coked by this mere mortal. He than bound my claws, i now had no way to fight or free myself. I struggled i jumped and gasped and shooke but no matter what i could not free myslef. We battled for what seemed like hours as we brushed aganst the walls of this great hall. this man wanted nothing less than my death. All of the warriors in the hall had now been awakened and had come to help rid me from this earth. But no mortals sword was sharp enough to break my skin. Only this one man had the strength to hold me at bay. As the leader of the pack had finally decided he had enough he riped my arm straight from it's socket. Pain ran through my body as he held my arm high all i could think about was getting away. I ran from that great hall with such speed mere man could not fathom.
Soon i arrived at the marsh and quickly went to my lair. The change was already starting to take place. I was now becoming once again what i had hated so much just seconds before. As i my hairy skin once again turned back to flesh i knew i would never again change. My arm held high as a trophy by a man stronger than all men. By the head honcho. I felt my life leaving me as blood ran from my gaping wound. Soon i knew it would be allover as i feel to the ground. My lair began to blur the light seemed to dim. I Tensed of as i went into a state of which i cant explain my blood pooling on the floor my life leaving me. All was over as i passed.
09-21-2003, 10:13 PM
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I only read the beginning half. But Grendel is basically the spawn of satan. So why would he be reluctant to go on his "terrible" mission. He enjoys that sort of stuff snatching up the kings men.
As i awoke i found a terrible burden apon my self. The moon was high and my skin burned. I knew i was about to embark on a terrible mission, but i could do nothing to stop myself.
Redo this sentence.
As i awoke i found a terrible burden apon my self. The moon was high and my skin burned. I knew i was about to embark on a terrible mission, but i could do nothing to stop myself.
Redo this sentence.
09-21-2003, 10:15 PM
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College freshman or Sophomore English? I read the book in my college english class. Fix the spealling errors first of all. Punctuation second. In times words are too repetative.
As I arrived at the halls of Herot the death of all those within lingered on in my mind. My sleeping prey unkowningly, huanted by the hour of its demise.
PLay with words some. It helps alot and gives you a better grade, My example wasn't that great but at least you know what I mean.
As i approached the halls of herot i could only think of one thing the death of all those within. I quickly reached the great hall in which my sleeping pray await.
As I arrived at the halls of Herot the death of all those within lingered on in my mind. My sleeping prey unkowningly, huanted by the hour of its demise.
PLay with words some. It helps alot and gives you a better grade, My example wasn't that great but at least you know what I mean.
09-21-2003, 10:19 PM
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It's a HS paper like i said there are spelling and grammer errors it's a rough draft. But keep up with the input. Oh the reason i said he didnt want to is because we coudl make grendel any knid of monster we wanted. So i made him basicly a werewolf.
09-21-2003, 10:28 PM
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Originally Posted by =RX-7 KID=-' date='Sep 21 2003, 07:19 PM
It's a HS paper like i said there are spelling and grammer errors it's a rough draft. But keep up with the input. Oh the reason i said he didnt want to is because we coudl make grendel any knid of monster we wanted. So i made him basicly a werewolf.
09-21-2003, 10:32 PM
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Originally Posted by Dramon_Killer' date='Sep 21 2003, 11:28 PM
Still Grendel is a beast who gets his joys out of killing regardless of what kinda of monster he is.
cain was sentenced to damnation for the murder of abel.
He is angry at the joy of the mead hall. He hates the light and song and the joy of men, because he is dammed for life.
